01-11-2013, 12:24 PM
Hi Fathima, sure it makes sense. You have interesting constructions. Here are my thoughts on this short piece:
I don't know if enchanted is your best title choice. I think that distinction belongs to "Beauty" then cut beauty from the poem. Here's how that would look.
Best,
Todd
I don't know if enchanted is your best title choice. I think that distinction belongs to "Beauty" then cut beauty from the poem. Here's how that would look.
(01-11-2013, 10:31 AM)Fathima Wrote: Does this make any sense?Just a thought.
Beauty
His suffering
Enchanted
Her misguided
Heart
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson