01-11-2013, 12:06 PM
Hey Fathima,
It makes sense.
I would write it like this instead:
His suffering
beauty
enchanted
her misguided
heart.
The caps at the beginning of each line threw me off because at first I thought it was several thoughts instead of just one. It's romantic and I like the use of "enchanting" a beautiful word that doesn't get used as often.
It makes sense.
I would write it like this instead:
His suffering
beauty
enchanted
her misguided
heart.
The caps at the beginning of each line threw me off because at first I thought it was several thoughts instead of just one. It's romantic and I like the use of "enchanting" a beautiful word that doesn't get used as often.