Balance (explicit)

[BennyBoy]

Thanks for the reply. I agree the rhymes sound forced... do you know of any good way to remedy that?

I was strict using 8 syllables for the first line and 10 for the next. I don't know why it doesn't flow smoothly.

I wrote this poem out of bitterness because I devoted my life to art and feel cheated out of more ''shallow'' pleasures like sex and money. Mostly sex.