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[nothing_good16]

i really liked this until the last line

"So please make me whole"..just so soooo needy an makes the author seem weak..who wants someone weak right ?

imo if you started with a question then maybe end it on a question..
'So how can I ever be whole?'..puts the ball back into the readers court kinda thing without the author losing face

errm if that makes any sense

that makes sense..I like that advice! thanks.