01-11-2013, 08:22 AM
(01-11-2013, 08:18 AM)Sonata Wrote: Hello, 2 days ago I started writing poems in English (I've been writing for a long time, but in Serbian). I've written 3 poems in 2 days, and fun thing is every poem is for a different section, I guess whilst writting I get better and better. Here is the first one:This is lovely...I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed this. I've just started writing poetry, so I'm not one to say, but I think I would prefer if you removed "that's her". Just my opinion, keep it there if you like it.
Her gracefulness
She reminds me of an
old, good book.
She is endless.
Beauty divine,
that's her.
Glorious, magnificent,
entirely mine.
Oh Lord, when her eyes stumble upon mine,
I, the lost one, am finally found.
Her gracefulness
is buried deep inside
of me.
