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[benthejack]

Fantastic start, although this could use a little editing as it doesn't seem as tight as "depression", although being is in a similar vein. I think it is probably the lack of solid imagery, and a few of the lines start to break up and not flow so nicely ("so this war is what we've come to one line million faces" and "and i HATE the cloth i laugh as i read and listen") maybe a few well placed commas would help.

Cheers for the read,
Ben