Tiny

Tiny

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01-10-2013, 11:33 AM

Hi,

Thank you all very much for your comments and feedback. I took them into consideration and made some changes. Is this better?

The dark filled her eyes with sparkles.
Rich grown voices told her they were stars.
Massive balloons of gas to explain it.
She laughed, "How tiny!"

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Tiny - by Fathima - 01-08-2013, 08:49 AM

RE: Tiny - by tectak - 01-08-2013, 08:51 AM

RE: Tiny - by arbil_poieo - 01-08-2013, 10:21 AM

RE: Tiny - by billy - 01-08-2013, 12:36 PM

RE: Tiny - by Todd - 01-08-2013, 06:09 PM

RE: Tiny - by Fathima - 01-10-2013, 11:33 AM

RE: Tiny - by Todd - 01-10-2013, 11:55 AM

RE: Tiny - by Fathima - 01-11-2013, 08:42 AM

RE: Tiny - by Sonata - 01-11-2013, 08:55 AM

RE: Tiny - by Fathima - 01-12-2013, 09:33 AM

RE: Tiny - by shemthepenman - 01-12-2013, 10:44 PM

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