Poieo

[Todd]

You had a lot of nice little touches here. I loved the warm cold, the obvious as the sun line, the blank paper.

I realize this isn't a critique forum and maybe I'm reading this wrong but this feels like a double negative (did you mean it to be)?

Neither syllables, rhyme
nor prose
can't change an iris of a flower

I keep wanting that to be can.

Also, and this is minor since in the second instance you have failures plural, did you mean it to be singular the first time you wrote it?

Nice piece Ash.