Darkness

[Jae Mc Donnell]

Hello DaedricPrince, and thankyou for the read. I like this poem. I like the rythem, and the way the last two lines round it all up. Nice work. I left a few comments below that you may find helpful

My hands lie to where I view;
Of where I see dark's fade.
There, I see my dispicable hue. I can see why this may not work for some.
For I can welcome my crumbling fate.
And to naught I see my death,
I lay in darkness where all is night. Change darkness to something like silence, as darkness with night seems a bit redundant.
Therefore, I close my eyes hoping for a last breath, Lose therefore.
And the bright beauty of light.
Finally; to where I think of end,
I wake to view a grim fate.
Eternal darkness with an unforgettable trend, I do get this, and I like it.
That imprisones me with all I dare hate.
Now, I must escape,
Or I will not live to see another day.