01-08-2013, 03:13 PM
Hey Ellz!
Let me start off by saying this was worth the visit.
"just like a thousand moments passing through"---I really like that image, I saw it as like a strong wind going through you and seeing everything clearly. Very clever.
My one nit would be the last 2 lines, this is packed with lovely solid imagery and I felt the last 2 lines fell short and it kinda left me disappointed.
Poems like this makes it easier for the reader to connect with because of the careful, thoughtful details. An amazing poem!
Let me start off by saying this was worth the visit.
"just like a thousand moments passing through"---I really like that image, I saw it as like a strong wind going through you and seeing everything clearly. Very clever.
My one nit would be the last 2 lines, this is packed with lovely solid imagery and I felt the last 2 lines fell short and it kinda left me disappointed.
Poems like this makes it easier for the reader to connect with because of the careful, thoughtful details. An amazing poem!