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Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem
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01-08-2013, 02:20 PM
I really enjoyed this poem and I think it's very sweet. I love personal poetry, I do agree that if you added a few more personal lines It would really top it off. what do you think about cutting a word in the second line to help it flow better."Our hands, a warmth that still lingers" just a thought
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Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem - by BennyBoy - 01-07-2013, 03:18 AM
RE: Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem - by rowens - 01-07-2013, 04:21 AM
RE: Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem - by BennyBoy - 01-07-2013, 04:56 AM
RE: Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem - by rowens - 01-07-2013, 05:10 AM
RE: Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem - by arbil_poieo - 01-07-2013, 10:17 AM
RE: Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem - by billy - 01-07-2013, 11:01 AM
RE: Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem - by BennyBoy - 01-08-2013, 08:16 AM
RE: Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem - by destiny1313 - 01-08-2013, 02:20 PM
RE: Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem - by BennyBoy - 01-08-2013, 02:30 PM
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