Tiny

[billy]

hi Fathima

no need to leave a link to other places the poem is posted at. seeing the poem here is enough. i agree about posting in the novice forum also and suggest you leave this one here and post any others there to start off with.

This is the first poem I have ever written. I don't read much poetry. Nor do I know much about it. But I wrote this poem a couple of days ago, and then wrote a couple more. I would like to know if it is any good, if it even makes sense, if it conveyed the message I tried to portray, how I can improve it, etc. Thank you.

Tiny

Still a little angel,
She gazed at the night filled with sparkles.
'How tiny! ' she expressed.
They told her they were 'stars'
But she only understood their tininess.
A massive balloon of gas, they explained it!
She laughed and thought, 'What tiny people.'

it has a primitive quality about it that i like. i think you could expand on who the 'she' is and who the "they are.