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01-08-2013, 10:38 AM

This reads nicely. Smile

The line that stumbled me is "Eternal darkness with an unforgettable trend." Huh

I would recommend maybe imagining a couple of solid images to hang the poem around.

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Darkness - by DaedricPrince - 12-30-2012, 03:33 PM

RE: Darkness - by brandontoh - 01-03-2013, 10:02 AM

RE: Darkness - by BennyBoy - 01-08-2013, 10:38 AM

RE: Darkness - by Jae Mc Donnell - 01-09-2013, 06:36 PM

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