Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem

[billy]

it's alway hard replying or advising on personal poetry, but here goes

Hi, I wrote this poem that I will inscribe in a book for my friend's birthday. I've spent several hours working on it, but I feel it's still pretty shoddy. Can you please help me improve it? Thank you in advance!

A Time Ahead

I'll never forget our first touch of fingers
Our hands produced a warmth that still lingers

Your smile, your laughter; angelic eyes
Undying kindness like blue endless skies

My faith in life you help instill
For you I care and always will

I found you in a touch,
a touch that echo's within the me you helped create.

I'd speak of mundane things like eyes, and laughter and smiles;
all inconsequential when measured against our friendship

I wanted to make this inscription as special as you are
I can't, I can only say "thank you"

i just felt that me saying this or that didn't or did work would be me talking phooey. instead i tried to write what i'd write to my friends where i the one writing it.