Please Help Me Improve This Birthday Poem

[BennyBoy]

Hi, I wrote this poem that I will inscribe in a book for my friend's birthday. I've spent several hours working on it, but I feel it's still pretty shoddy. Can you please help me improve it? Thank you in advance!

1st Edit

I'll never forget our first touch of fingers
Our hands produced a warmth that still lingers

You cover my heart with your soft embrace
I trace my feelings along your fair face

Music in your laughter; love in your eyes
Undying kindness like endless blue skies

My faith in life you help instill
For you I care and always will

Original version;

A Time Ahead

I'll never forget our first touch of fingers
Our hands produced a warmth that still lingers

Your smile, your laughter; angelic eyes
Undying kindness like blue endless skies

My faith in life you help instill
For you I care and always will