01-06-2013, 09:28 PM
Already been pointed out the few areas I would tighten up.
'Rain after drought' seems a little heavy handed and slightly clichéd.
There a few words you could prune.
Outside of that I enjoyed the read it flowed very nicely with good imagery.
Poppy ~xx~
'Rain after drought' seems a little heavy handed and slightly clichéd.
There a few words you could prune.
Outside of that I enjoyed the read it flowed very nicely with good imagery.
Poppy ~xx~
