01-06-2013, 05:35 PM
[quote='billy' pid='110194' dateline='1357437431']
i'm struggling to see the rhymes in the luc bat aj. the sestina seems okay so far. though i am presuming it's accentual verse with ten syls. i'll put it in a frame for you later.
and yeah, of course it's worth doing 
See what i've done in post above.
Does this improve the vissiblity of rhyme scheme at all. (Think the Luc Bat rhyme stress is now off in a couple of places...had to do a major re-work on the sestina as line count was completly off.... which then threw the Luc bat meaning and when I re-worked this, I lost track of the alternating syllable count on this as well...
. Is mostly beaten back into place but slightly lost path of meaning in the process. Bugger !
i'm struggling to see the rhymes in the luc bat aj. the sestina seems okay so far. though i am presuming it's accentual verse with ten syls. i'll put it in a frame for you later.
and yeah, of course it's worth doing See what i've done in post above.
Does this improve the vissiblity of rhyme scheme at all. (Think the Luc Bat rhyme stress is now off in a couple of places...had to do a major re-work on the sestina as line count was completly off.... which then threw the Luc bat meaning and when I re-worked this, I lost track of the alternating syllable count on this as well...
. Is mostly beaten back into place but slightly lost path of meaning in the process. Bugger !