01-06-2013, 02:49 PM
Thank you Tectak for reading and for your comments. As far as "vanillin" I was going for something artificial that can be found in chocolate but I guess that wasn't the best example. I do need to give more clues on whats going on in the poem's present day in stanza 5 and be clear with it's meaning. I will look over it more and make the changes, thank you again for all your comments.