Apart

[Stalker]

Serrrsh

tinkering? well I would twiddle with the end even more



If you can please me,
I will stay.


if you can please me? - well we know she can, she has done so before I figure,

If you please me
if you still please me

perhaps - if it pleases me


Will he stay? it is so clinical, the poem as a whole, so I kinda doubt that he will stay, she may please him. Will sounds a bit definite and committed to me.

he may stay
he can stay
maybe he can stay
he might stay


do me as you like - this I love - a taunting challenging passive agressive surrender, and it is most definitely not 'do me as I like / liked'

I want to write a poem with do-me as one word in it - yeah.

cheers

StalkeR