Seasonal (sections)

[billy]

i'm struggling to see the rhymes in the luc bat aj. the sestina seems okay so far. though i am presuming it's accentual verse with ten syls. i'll put it in a frame for you later. and yeah, of course it's worth doing

Done a fairly major re-work. I've set it out yet another way to see if this is any easier to follow the path of the different poems / forms.
Some brief note to work out what the hell is going on here:-
The numbers in brackets are what I make the syllable counts to be.

A) = Luc bat should be an alternating count of 6 /8. With the rhyme scheme being on the 8th, 6th, 6th syllable count repeating.
B) = the haiku / senyru form with a 5/7/5 syllble count throughout.
C) = The sestina with repeating pattern of 6 end words and a regular line count ( i chose 10).
If you have the staying power please check my counting as in a couple of places I had reservations as to if my count was correct.
Also would be greatful for any feed back concerning if this is just too long and tedious for words or if there is any merrit in this at all.


Stanza 1.
L1.
A) March sighing for her love. (6)
B) Timed out burst. Feet first. (5)
C) necrotic, then new born, now nurturing. (10)

L2.
A) Of late, urgent opportunist, (8)
B) budding swelling, breaking dam. (7)
C) Weathering, the knowledge. The need growing. (10)

L3.
A) Now loves’ unprejudiced, (6)
B) bright light, new day. Start. (5)
C) A race to embrace life. Replenishing, (10)

L4.
A) April, gained through pained mist. Burning, (8).
B). start right, richly veined, (5)
C) every cell, a laden nurse in waiting. (10)

L4.
A) April, gained through pained mist. Burning, (8). this is a repeated three lines.
B). start right, richly veined, (5)
C) every cell, a laden nurse in waiting. (10)


L5.
A) Bourgeoning subterfuge, (6)
B) overflowing growing grass. (7)
C) re-charging, passing and sadly leaving. (10)

L6.
A) Springs the heavy deluge. Doe eyed, (8)
B) Soft breath nuzzling. (5) ( 2 or 3 syllables in nuzzling?)
C) The slender, tender touch of love resting. (10)

Stanza 2.
L1
A) May leaves the safe refuge, (6)
B) nuzzling, nipping. (5)
C) Freshly planted, rising, never resting, (10)

L2
A) rough and rude the buds are shaken! (8)
B) Leap, thrust, hold. Innocent eyes (7)
C) behold the glazed nuance of nurturing. (10)

L3
A) Taken. Lust awakened, (6)
B) may pierce, slipped, held deep. (5)
C) Cleaving into clefts, dividing, leaving, (10)

L4.
A) June all too soon, overtaken. (8)
B) Deep sleep, dappled shade, (5)
C) green and golden garlands growing, (8) working on this stilll

L5.
A) sowing a veil of tears. (6)
B) Bugs biting, raindrops kissing. (7)
C). Soft voiced, the trees are whispering, waiting; (10)

L6.
A) worn out by drought filled fears, scolding (8)
B) fighting, free running, (5)
C) cloud baiting. Dewy brush replenishing. (10)



Ok worn out...will post the rest tommorow.