The Monologue of a Misanthrope

[tectak]

Thank you for your suggestions. I will correct the mistakes.
But can you explain why the last stanza isn't good? Is it grammatically incorrect, or it does not create the effect it's supposed to?
I used shapeless on purpose. Does the repetition create a "rough" feel when reading the poem?

Hi zeevs,
Duplicated words are permissable. In serious crit, though, they are looked upon as a failing Not seriously erroneous but worth pointing out. The stanza I took against is rhythmically all over the place but primarily this is due to the emphasies falling wrongly. Line three, though, is a whole beat short. If you use strong octameter it is noticeable when words need to be unnaturally pronounced to make them fit smoothly. Note...smoothly. They can be levered in to fit but do you want that? Strictly speaking, that word "frightened" is usually pronounced "fri-tend" but you require " Fri-ten-ed" to make it fit. Then there is the rhyme. Some don't care...some do; but if you establish a rhyme scheme then you do care. A bit of a shock, then, to see "frightened" rhymed with "sighted", "tend" with "ed". "Sighted" also seems desperately forced; because it is a word ending with "-ed" it shall be used. The meaning, though is unclear.
Nonetheless, I took to this piece......and I don't say that often these days.
Best,
tectak