01-05-2013, 06:50 PM
Thank you for your suggestions. I will correct the mistakes.
But can you explain why the last stanza isn't good? Is it grammatically incorrect, or it does not create the effect it's supposed to?
I used shapeless on purpose. Does the repetition create a "rough" feel when reading the poem?
But can you explain why the last stanza isn't good? Is it grammatically incorrect, or it does not create the effect it's supposed to?
I used shapeless on purpose. Does the repetition create a "rough" feel when reading the poem?