contemplating

[Todd]

Hi Serge,

I like this tight little piece. I have no issue with the title though I could easily see this retitled as something like "Divorce". I don't have a lot of suggestions and they're light as far as that goes. The poem holds together well--so, options to consider. Here goes:

Looking into the mirror,
I am glad, you're in a
happy shape again.--Maybe a line break after shape to have again sit alone on its own line

Where's the woman gone
and where is the money?
Do we care? We better should not.--maybe a line break after better

I should take a stroll outside
even in the rain:

Luck is out--I like the type of "luck" in mind. This is someone finally ready to restart and risk again
there.


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thanks to Pete and tec. helping me to fix it. ;-)

I enjoyed the read.

Best,

Todd