contemplating

[Pete Ak]

Enjoyed the way you present the message, holding back "there" for a few lines is very clever, it works both intellectually and poetically (for me at least.) I'm not sure if in the heart of the piece there is enough to chew on and I wonder why you use "we" here, I read it as a colloquialism which if it is, I think it's unnecessary.
The denouement is elegant, I love the double twist you've effected with 'luck' - the extra spacing you use helps the reader to 'get it.'
I'm envious!