01-03-2013, 09:09 PM
I find this exquisite maybe because I know what the poet is talking about.
Yes, one could shorten it.
I am with TomH on the you and me Charlie line.
On the other hand I do love:
Coke me up, baby, then let me down.
Yes!
I must think more about: would legality crush our passion?
hm? Tricky. I tend to say: yes, it would.
fine poem. enjoyed to read. thank you and cheers
serge
Yes, one could shorten it.
I am with TomH on the you and me Charlie line.
On the other hand I do love:
Coke me up, baby, then let me down.
Yes!
I must think more about: would legality crush our passion?
hm? Tricky. I tend to say: yes, it would.
fine poem. enjoyed to read. thank you and cheers
serge
