01-03-2013, 02:22 AM
Some of these lines are awkward and foreign, most notably, this one: "their stupidity that saved them from the misery that was being forced upon them."
Try to refine and remove the excess. Trim the fat. Get rid of "the's" "for" "a" "with" "this" etc.
(it's what I try to do)
Try to refine and remove the excess. Trim the fat. Get rid of "the's" "for" "a" "with" "this" etc.
(it's what I try to do)
I'll be there in a minute.