01-02-2013, 05:49 PM
First of all....Please don't piss off 
...I need all the help I can get with this and it seams to have generated a stunned silence from nearly everyone else. (Can't say I blame them...I don't know what possessed me to even start this
).
(I'm in serious need of Leanne’s' help with the Sestina when she comes back...I think it is all over the place).
Ok.
After the problem of the punctuation, how to set it out has been my second biggest stress.
The Luc bat can be taken as one continuous flow.
The Haiku are best set out as three line stanza and the Sestina is set out as six line stanza (with a three line conclusion...the last three lines moved to the centre align haiku section, actually belong to the Sestina section...will move them back again...I know it doesn't look so neat for now, but will confuse things for the purposes of editing if I don't).
When I posted the first full edit in the Haiku thread I had it set out in three line stanza with a double space after the second stanza (to help the read of the sestina) repeated through to the end ( and I had the last three sestina lines centred as when read as a whole they would flow from the last sestina line naturally).
I am wondering if for the sake of editing I should continue with presenting the individual poems for assessment as I still think that it is a bit daunting for people to be asked to tackle this as a whole unit. I like the presentation in the table it does clarify the intent of the poem for the editing process and will be of great help when adjusting the punctuation. But for now I'm going to ask people to just focus and give feed back on the Luc Bat section.
Do you think I should keep this all together as one massive thread as I work on this..Or should I post the different section each in a new thread? (Was planning to re-post your table with each section though).
Sorry, too many question I know.
I can see now that there is a line missing towards the end of the sestina, got to go feed horses and take mother shopping ....Lucky me! Will get to it later today.
...I need all the help I can get with this and it seams to have generated a stunned silence from nearly everyone else. (Can't say I blame them...I don't know what possessed me to even start this).(I'm in serious need of Leanne’s' help with the Sestina when she comes back...I think it is all over the place).
Ok.
After the problem of the punctuation, how to set it out has been my second biggest stress.
The Luc bat can be taken as one continuous flow.
The Haiku are best set out as three line stanza and the Sestina is set out as six line stanza (with a three line conclusion...the last three lines moved to the centre align haiku section, actually belong to the Sestina section...will move them back again...I know it doesn't look so neat for now, but will confuse things for the purposes of editing if I don't).
When I posted the first full edit in the Haiku thread I had it set out in three line stanza with a double space after the second stanza (to help the read of the sestina) repeated through to the end ( and I had the last three sestina lines centred as when read as a whole they would flow from the last sestina line naturally).
I am wondering if for the sake of editing I should continue with presenting the individual poems for assessment as I still think that it is a bit daunting for people to be asked to tackle this as a whole unit. I like the presentation in the table it does clarify the intent of the poem for the editing process and will be of great help when adjusting the punctuation. But for now I'm going to ask people to just focus and give feed back on the Luc Bat section.
Do you think I should keep this all together as one massive thread as I work on this..Or should I post the different section each in a new thread? (Was planning to re-post your table with each section though).
Sorry, too many question I know.
I can see now that there is a line missing towards the end of the sestina, got to go feed horses and take mother shopping ....Lucky me! Will get to it later today.