01-02-2013, 06:48 AM
Hey Bizzy
An eloquent approach to love. I love the imagery its simple but insightful to the power of love. My only critique would be to cut the excess words like So in line 2, sprang out of the dark in line 3 (its a good thought, but in my opinion it doesnt offer anything to the overall image) and the last line I would rephrase it to say something like "gather your fruit" or whatever you can come up with, just something stronger and more "poetic"
A harvest of love is beautiful, to me that can have many meanings like love growing or healthy love or even a lot of love.
A really sweet poem in my opinion.
An eloquent approach to love. I love the imagery its simple but insightful to the power of love. My only critique would be to cut the excess words like So in line 2, sprang out of the dark in line 3 (its a good thought, but in my opinion it doesnt offer anything to the overall image) and the last line I would rephrase it to say something like "gather your fruit" or whatever you can come up with, just something stronger and more "poetic"
A harvest of love is beautiful, to me that can have many meanings like love growing or healthy love or even a lot of love.
A really sweet poem in my opinion.