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[shotknot]

Okay, um... how about you eliminate some of the adjectives, and concentrate on maybe just a few of the ideas and develop them more. Also having shorter lines would make it easier to build a rhythm methinks. Hope that helped!

Edit: I tried to edit your poem to demonstrate what I meant. See what you think:

The howls of a dying cat,
masked by swarming dust.
And the callous night.

Fur rustled up, flakes leaving trails,
her stomach swelling; full of sick.

Drags her paws through rough cement;
suffering through the aches, 
distracting from survival.
...
Her heart speeds to an utter stop.

Uncaring eyes look past her pain.
Thoughtless people ignore her end.

Scraping her off the road, 
body melts into hot cement,
lifeless like humanity's heart.

Thank you very much I'll definitely use your edited version of my poem as reference when re-writing!