01-01-2013, 06:12 AM
(01-01-2013, 03:55 AM)aaron Wrote: i would agree with pete it really looks like you've slaved over this piece. Images are crisp the rhymes seem to flow naturally. i get a sense of loss, i feel something deeper than just a bridge being destroyed. however I dont think it lacks drama or even needs to be dramatic to get its point across. I really enjoyed this piece and i have learned from it. I hope to soon be writing things as well crafted as this, maybe.Ah, yes. The headphones. I have no idea who put them there or why. No doubt billy will remove them in due course.
thanx for the read
oh um... what do the headphones mean before the title? does that mean you have this recorded for listening somewhere?
Thanks again for your time and comments.
tectak