12-29-2012, 03:46 PM
Hi Jae,
Not sure how firmly the rules need to be adhered to. You have the right overall syllable count (17) but the normal progression is 5-7-5 (You have 7-5-5)...this is Billy's bag tho' so I'm sure he will let us both know.
As an image this one did not really work for me, as it took something i normall associate with beauty and effectivly profaned it. Although it was an interesting perspective. (Falling blossom petals as abundant as dog shit).
(Sorry!...but I did really like your money's troubles post.
)
AJ
Not sure how firmly the rules need to be adhered to. You have the right overall syllable count (17) but the normal progression is 5-7-5 (You have 7-5-5)...this is Billy's bag tho' so I'm sure he will let us both know.
As an image this one did not really work for me, as it took something i normall associate with beauty and effectivly profaned it. Although it was an interesting perspective. (Falling blossom petals as abundant as dog shit).
(Sorry!...but I did really like your money's troubles post.
)AJ