Dare I think for myself

[tectak]

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Do tell me, which one shall fall prey?
The ones whose devils tear at their throatYou have shifted from singular to plural for no good reason and got muddled!.......change L1 to "ones" is better cohesion but you then have two one's and one throat belonging to them! You are good enough to out this right without any more from me
Setting fire to every sense and thought
Whilst whipping them to enslavement just tweak the punctuation a little because it is inconsistent.

Or the ones who sit in comfort
Of the body, mind, and spirit
As demons play friend, and counsel
Distracting minds with their sparkle this stanza, and probably the whole piece, cries out for rhyme......I am not going to get it, I know

Or should we stand always aware
Treating both as teacher, and foe
Whilst being self-mindful, and astute
Failing only by lack of thought Nice and meaningful...what does it mean?

Do tell me, which one shall fall prey?
The ones whose devils tear at their throat
Setting fire to every sense and thought
Whilst whipping them to submission

Or the ones who sit in comfort
Of the body, mind, and spirit
As demons play friend, and council
Distracting eyes with their sparkle[

Should we stand constantly aware?
Treating both as teacher, and foe
Whilst being self-mindful, and astute
Stand we fall prey only to self

I am tempted to duplicate my crit! There are some great working near-hypotheses in this which I think are worth SERIOU SLY developing. It is, to mix a metaphor, half- cooked.
besr,
tectak