12-28-2012, 10:03 AM
my only problem was the wording in the beginning of the 2nd stanza. the first two lines felt a bit of a mouthful.
my nits are, a bit wordy in a few places and a bit of grammar fixing.
Women! Needless to say, I had my fun.
Needless to say, because all my neigbors
say three says in two and bit lines, (neighbors/neighbours)
as for the content, it was enjoyable and fun with lots to like.
thanks for the read and welcome to the site
my nits are, a bit wordy in a few places and a bit of grammar fixing.
Women! Needless to say, I had my fun.
Needless to say, because all my neigbors
say three says in two and bit lines, (neighbors/neighbours)
as for the content, it was enjoyable and fun with lots to like.
thanks for the read and welcome to the site