12-26-2012, 07:05 AM
It's a simple rhyming poem. Some of the rhymes feel forced. But the message of the poem somehow makes that seem unimportant.
What about the word "prize"? "Pay the prize"?
When you get the deeper message of the poem, it does seem like you'd want to express it with less forced sounding lines.
It's on its way. A few more drafts maybe?
What about the word "prize"? "Pay the prize"?
When you get the deeper message of the poem, it does seem like you'd want to express it with less forced sounding lines.
It's on its way. A few more drafts maybe?