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The Sun
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12-23-2012, 05:57 PM
The problem with this piece for me is that the only thing worthy of comment is the voice you use to narrate it, unfortunately this reader doesn't find that voice either engaging or particularly poetic. I'd work on finding more interesting/unique ways of talking about the sun. Good luck!
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The Sun - by Eric shelman - 12-20-2012, 06:27 AM
RE: The Sun - by billy - 12-20-2012, 09:58 AM
RE: The Sun - by tectak - 12-23-2012, 07:35 AM
RE: The Sun - by Pete Ak - 12-23-2012, 05:57 PM
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