12-23-2012, 04:42 AM
Thanks.
Actually, the very last line bothers me. This isn't in the critique section, but, still, if anyone has a better suggestion to rhyme with "I" that will fit well in the context, it would be great.
Actually, the very last line bothers me. This isn't in the critique section, but, still, if anyone has a better suggestion to rhyme with "I" that will fit well in the context, it would be great.