12-21-2012, 09:30 PM
Feels as if you're throwing images at us, which from my point of view don't hang together that well. At the end I found myself asking 'so'? What we have is the moon making a series of declarations but with hat intent? Not saying intent is necessary but something is!
On the positive side you can certainly put highly impactful phrases together, a little more thought about how they should be integrated is what's needed.
On the positive side you can certainly put highly impactful phrases together, a little more thought about how they should be integrated is what's needed.