The Moon
#4
Feels as if you're throwing images at us, which from my point of view don't hang together that well. At the end I found myself asking 'so'? What we have is the moon making a series of declarations but with hat intent? Not saying intent is necessary but something is!
On the positive side you can certainly put highly impactful phrases together, a little more thought about how they should be integrated is what's needed.
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The Moon - by Eric shelman - 12-20-2012, 06:41 AM
RE: The Moon - by billy - 12-20-2012, 09:55 AM
RE: The Moon - by tectak - 12-21-2012, 02:18 AM
RE: The Moon - by tectak - 12-27-2012, 12:24 AM
RE: The Moon - by Pete Ak - 12-21-2012, 09:30 PM
RE: The Moon - by Eric shelman - 12-26-2012, 09:01 AM
RE: The Moon - by billy - 12-26-2012, 11:22 AM
RE: The Moon - by arbil_poieo - 12-26-2012, 09:11 AM
RE: The Moon - by Todd - 12-26-2012, 09:13 AM



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