Xmas senryu

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Xmas senryu

billy Offline

Are you alluding to me?

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12-20-2012, 09:48 AM

nice twist.
id have puty 'was a" in front of birthday spectacle and removed 'feels like'
in order to create the cut i'd also remove the ?

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Xmas senryu - by benthejack - 12-20-2012, 07:21 AM

RE: Xmas senryu - by billy - 12-20-2012, 09:48 AM

RE: Xmas senryu - by benthejack - 12-22-2012, 12:25 PM

RE: Xmas senryu - by Hurst - 01-05-2013, 12:43 PM

RE: Xmas senryu - by Hurst - 12-20-2012, 08:51 PM

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