12-19-2012, 10:11 PM
Thank you benthejack. I agree with you completely. There are a ton of filler words, and I'm glad you pointed it out. It is definitely in need of a lot more descriptive meat, and that's what I intend to do. I look forward to working on the revised version. Thanks again for the honesty! It means a lot.
Fear the ghost with the steel face that hides in light; dread the horror Borborygmus.