12-19-2012, 05:44 AM
Great poem Heslopian.
I didn't find this sad really, seemed to me more of a kid's wise realisation of the fallacy of anger and spite in the name of a loving god. (although I guess everyone picks exactly what they want to see out of what they read
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"Submission by the blade" I loved this.
Also the choice of queer was perfect, the contentious nature of the word really punctuates the rest of the story.
I actually don't have any negative critique (although I did look close!), it was a beautiful poem
I didn't find this sad really, seemed to me more of a kid's wise realisation of the fallacy of anger and spite in the name of a loving god. (although I guess everyone picks exactly what they want to see out of what they read
) "Submission by the blade" I loved this.
Also the choice of queer was perfect, the contentious nature of the word really punctuates the rest of the story.
I actually don't have any negative critique (although I did look close!), it was a beautiful poem
If something happens and you can remedy it, Why worry?
And if something happens that you can't remedy, Still why worry?
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And if something happens that you can't remedy, Still why worry?
www.benjack.co.nz