Behind a Different Door:

[tectak]

is not even the title poetic, (throw me a fricken bone here please)

while i do see it as "a poem" i do see where you're coming from, the piece is indefensible so i won't defend it. i'm just grateful that you took the time to leave me solid feedback via an overview.

i do have one question? what's a curse verse....is it with lots of expletives cos i'm good at that seriously, i haven't heard of curse verse before.

OK, the fuckin title has some charm,
the bloody broom is locked away again.
If you're the twat that caused the fuckin harm
I hope you die in fuckin writhin' pain.

That's curse-verse. I have been writing hearse-verse recently (I'm OK now) and will return to mirth-verse shortly. If I can get a quick one in, it will be terse-verse.....on the other hand, if it don't gell it ain't aspic, and if it don't improve it's worse-verse. Slightly pressurised and blathered poems are often burst-verse, whereas a lack of rhyming couplets means you are writing dearth-verse.