12-17-2012, 10:21 AM
Death of a flower, death of me more like
I'm sure most of you are thinking, 'for feck sake, would you ever get this right before we have to put you down'. Well please don't be so mean. Just kindin.
Thank you AJ for the help and the kind words. I have posted a new edit up top. Oh and yes the smiles are tops.
its a fart process. Yeup. very immature.
Todd I agree. I think it's just because I'm so new to poetry I'm a bit unsure of what works, so I'm not being confident with what I was trying for. But of course this is my own fault, I will get there. And thanks again for the help.
aaron thank you for the kind words. I have changed that line back and I hope this edit works better.
I'm sure most of you are thinking, 'for feck sake, would you ever get this right before we have to put you down'. Well please don't be so mean. Just kindin.
Thank you AJ for the help and the kind words. I have posted a new edit up top. Oh and yes the smiles are tops.
its a fart process. Yeup. very immature.Todd I agree. I think it's just because I'm so new to poetry I'm a bit unsure of what works, so I'm not being confident with what I was trying for. But of course this is my own fault, I will get there. And thanks again for the help.
aaron thank you for the kind words. I have changed that line back and I hope this edit works better.