12-16-2012, 10:49 PM
Thank you Cidermaid and Bizzy for taking the trouble to comment and make suggestions.
My poem was really a challenge of structure to see if I could maintain the stanza format with meaningful new rhymes for "door" as well as telling a story.
It's really about a person anxiously awaiting (good or bad) news - Perhaps outside the boss's office or a doctor's surgery etc - To help alleviate the worry, thoughts are diverted to focus on the door itself and it's origins.
My poem was really a challenge of structure to see if I could maintain the stanza format with meaningful new rhymes for "door" as well as telling a story.
It's really about a person anxiously awaiting (good or bad) news - Perhaps outside the boss's office or a doctor's surgery etc - To help alleviate the worry, thoughts are diverted to focus on the door itself and it's origins.