12-15-2012, 09:00 PM
I am lovin the re-write
Safety vest sunrise (ace)
Crashing the car after nights is a great way to end, nice work and your additional lines add a lot to the poem. Try to avoid using the same word in conecutive stanza's ie. silent in 6 and 7.
Safety vest sunrise (ace)
Crashing the car after nights is a great way to end, nice work and your additional lines add a lot to the poem. Try to avoid using the same word in conecutive stanza's ie. silent in 6 and 7.
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out