12-15-2012, 01:01 PM
Thank you for your great feedback, Todd! With the "veil of love" line I wanted to imply something gentle, like a breeze stirring curtains. The original word was "pierced".
I hadn't actually considered the date problem with the Iraq war, but yes, it did start after this poem is set, so I'll remove that line. I also like your idea about the fiery sword. I may see if I can add a few lines to explore that. Thanks again
I hadn't actually considered the date problem with the Iraq war, but yes, it did start after this poem is set, so I'll remove that line. I also like your idea about the fiery sword. I may see if I can add a few lines to explore that. Thanks again
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe