In Kahoutek’s Dreams

[monablackbird]

While I agree that Route 66 is iconic enough to remove "the" I think it makes sense to leave it because you're referring to two different Route 66s - the one in reality and the one in a dream. When you say Brahman's are you talking about the god Brahma or a Brahman priest? Maybe there's some way to make this more clear for the reader. Or maybe I'm wrong and the right name of the god is Brahman and not Brahma. Love the reference to Kali - especially in connection with Brahma - since it gives the whole thing a very distinct voice and vibe that I like.

Sorry for the brevity. I'm getting used to this whole feedback thing after a long hiatus from poetry. All in all, I like this poem quite a bit and think it has a lot of potential.