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Walking Towards Echoes
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12-14-2012, 09:58 AM
You definitely have a way with words and you know.how to use them although I'd suggest you work on making it flow. Its things like conjunctions and transitions that keep your poem from reaching full potential ex. " Loneliness it drove me Grail quest to find the one" if the words were tied together in a sense this could make for a great couple of lines however it sounds a bit off. Run through it a few times using these pointers and you'll improve immensely! (:
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Walking Towards Echoes - by TwistedAngel - 12-13-2012, 03:38 AM
RE: Walking Towards Echoes - by benthejack - 12-13-2012, 07:19 AM
RE: Walking Towards Echoes - by Philatone - 12-13-2012, 02:21 PM
RE: Walking Towards Echoes - by tectak - 12-13-2012, 10:27 PM
RE: Walking Towards Echoes - by TwistedAngel - 12-14-2012, 03:02 AM
RE: Walking Towards Echoes - by tectak - 12-15-2012, 07:18 AM
RE: Walking Towards Echoes - by rowens - 12-14-2012, 03:46 AM
RE: Walking Towards Echoes - by xx81510xx - 12-14-2012, 09:58 AM
RE: Walking Towards Echoes - by TwistedAngel - 12-24-2012, 07:36 PM
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