Walking Towards Echoes

[Philatone]

hey twisted!
some thoughts for you, specifically looking at structure

The emptyness inside me...watch your spelling! for an opening, this does not strike me as being fresh enough. people talking about voids is relatively common; can you make it stronger?
Wos calling out your name...again, check spelling (who is)
Clarity lost in echoes
Boucing off my walls of shame

Loneliness it drove me..don't need to repeat the subject (could drop the "it"). it makes the structure feel a bit formal and stiff
Grail quest to find the one
To find in who's arms I'd fit...this line and one above repeat some ideas; perhaps they could be combined?
That name to whom I belong..."that name to whom I" is a bit clunky to read. the sounds are not too pleasant

In turmoil I became blinded....but what turmoil? there is a sense of distress in the piece, but the cause is nowhere. it makes it harder for me to connect to
Ambling down many winding lanes...something in this line feels like excess. the "down"? "many"? one could be chopped
Ample footpath choices
Destinations all the same

In confusion I wos broken...again, spelling
One name I'd never find
Souls so tattered an well worn ...and?
Meandering until the end of time...this line feels like it is a couple of syllables too long to really fit

Tiredness took me over
So rested by an inn
There you stood with arms open
An took me with all my sin

Cleansed an refreshed you made me
I'd been searching for so long
Alas your name it wasn't the one
But now I smile, as I keep on moving on

right now, each stanza strikes me as being dangerously independent. that means that the transition from beginning to end is lacking to some degree. without a transition, the whole poem feels like it is in a constant start-stop-start-stop motion. making sure that each stanza is clearly connected to the last and is crucial to the rest of the poem will work wonders for the piece. I hope this can help