12-13-2012, 07:33 AM
I just love "the harp of the world" 
Maybe "as cancer consumes" and get rid of "your body"? Great line/stanza break on burrow. Would "apple sans core" on a line by itself be a bit too pretentious?
What about (as the theologians say) ?
Beautiful closing lines -- there's definitely a mood here, a little futility, a little liberation at the thought of not being actually that important in the scheme of the universe. Sorry to be brief, I'm in a bit of a rush, but I really enjoyed this.
Maybe "as cancer consumes" and get rid of "your body"? Great line/stanza break on burrow. Would "apple sans core" on a line by itself be a bit too pretentious?
What about (as the theologians say) ?
Beautiful closing lines -- there's definitely a mood here, a little futility, a little liberation at the thought of not being actually that important in the scheme of the universe. Sorry to be brief, I'm in a bit of a rush, but I really enjoyed this.
It could be worse