Walking Towards Echoes

[benthejack]

I definitely felt this poem!
I guess the ambling/lost search for somebody is well known to most. I really liked the environment that built in my head, especially in the third stanza!

You're asking for serious critique, I'll stretch myself this time and try my best provide something useful

The emptyness inside me I understand this line because it's well used, can you express it more originally/visually?
Wos calling out your name Does an emptiness call? could this be tighter knit with line one? eg(a bad eg but one nonetheless): a vacuum (like in space), desperate to fill with your name
Clarity lost in echoes
Boucing off my walls of shame I loved these lines, well put!

Loneliness it drove me
Grail quest to find the one
To find in who's arms I'd fit
That name to whom I belong This stanza communicates perfectly but tastes a little bland. Can you make the quest seem more... something?

In turmoil I became blinded
Ambling down many winding lanes beautiful image.
Ample footpath choices
Destinations all the same beautiful stanza.

In confusion I wos broken
One name I'd never find
Souls so tattered an well worn
Meandering until the end of time

Tiredness took me over
So rested by an inn I didn't really understand the image of an inn, it stood out and doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the ambiance of the poem. But that could just be me
There you stood with arms open can you express this in a more interesting and original way?
An took me with all my sin

Cleansed an refreshed you made me
I'd been searching for so long
Alas your name it wasn't the one
But now I smile, as I keep on moving on Fantastic ending